3 things I would change
1. I would add more of how my paragraph effect the audience and how they would react
2. I would also clarify up my paragraphs and make them more understandable
3. May sure my whole paper is in the same tense(3rd person) and make sure to use Burtons name instead of him or he.
My favorite Movies
-Bourne Movies
-SWAT
-Lord of the Rings(3rd and 2nd are the best)
-Mission Imposible
-Italian Job
-ZooLander
-Gladiator(EDITED)
-Matrixs(EDITED)
-What about Bob
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Older Movies
-Better off Dead
-Sneakers
Ha Gladiator is one of the best movies ever! Sadly I couldn't put (EDITED) near mine.
ReplyDeleteBetter Off Dead is hilarious! I remember the first time I saw it I thought it was the dumbest movie ever but for some reason, the second time I saw it it made me laugh so hard! Good show!
ReplyDeleteWhat About Bob is one of the funniest movies ever! My friends quote it all the time. Love the Bourne movies too
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